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[arethinn]

fingertips lightly to brow
lifting strands of hair away
hand to cheek
i want to--
can't not--

your eyes first widen
     --disbelief
then close
     no -- i'll believe --
     i'll do anything
     to be allowed to believe this.

i pause, uncertain
drop my hand to yours
fingertips lightly to wrist
do you want to--
can you--

your eyes first widen
     --more, again, please
then close
     only your touch
     can make it true
     can give me faith.

Comments

[amberite.livejournal.com]

I like this.

[arethinn]

Thanks. I do have a specific scene in mind, but I think describing it more definitely (i.e. so one could identify the participants and what, exactly, they are doing besides what's already spelled out) would ruin the effect.

[shalora.livejournal.com]

Just... wow. That's wonderfully beautiful; somehow specific and yet wonderfully vague, deeply evocative and touching.

[arethinn]

See my comment to amberite :) I do have something specific in mind, but I thought it better just to wave vaguely in its general direction rather than talk about it explicitly. :)

[shalora.livejournal.com]

Yeah, I'd seen that response. Personally, I applaud that decision; the lack of explicit detail gives it a softness that is both sweet and powerful. :)

[alces2.livejournal.com]

I too really like the poem.